Thread:Hatebunny/@comment-29342734-20161215185517/@comment-3361105-20161222211437


 * Smith Farm:
 * The first sentence should describe what it is. I suggest switching the line about its location with the second line about its residents. They matter more than where it is.
 * Your bit about "the smiths, better known as the Kent Family" assumes that a reader would know about whatever mysterious plot twist has caused Clark Kent to actually be Clark Smith - I only have vague knowledge about it. While it should be written in-universe, you should try to make it possible for unfamiliar readers to understand that this information was revealed to be the case after the fact - or don't mention it at all, see:
 * Does a page for a farm that is called Kent Farm because the people who live there call themselves the Kents need to be named something it was never called because their real name was a secret?


 * Keystone Saloon:
 * Again, tell us what it is, before you tell us where it is.
 * Feels well-written and descriptive, but also a bit terse, if you know what I mean.


 * Jimmy Crew:
 * Use past tense for character histories. If they're alive, you can still say "Jimmy Crew is a guy..." but from that point on, anything that he did in a comic should be written as if he DID them, and is not DOING them.
 * Phrases like "among other actions" and "among others" are unnecessary teases. You have a platform to write verbose descriptions of a character's actions on this wiki. If the information isn't important enough to include, don't mention it at all, rather than alluding to it with vague phrases. If it is important, go into as much detail as necessary to get across the character's role and development.
 * Small peeve: "Team Green Arrow" should probably just be "Team Arrow". That's been the accepted term since at least 2007, based on the page history.

If these are coming off as aggressively critical rather than constructively critical, I don't intend them to. Overall, they're well-written descriptions, and welcome too.

Minor characters and locations tend not to have a lot of info to write about anyway. Major characters would likely get a bit more complicated.