Thread:Tupka217/@comment-32118528-20171222130110/@comment-1038387-20171222132615

Being valid, or true, is only half the story. Slapping one overly long, poorly composed sentence with no source at the end of the section is no improvement.


 * "Sometime afterwards": The article currently only has a writeup of her first appearance. By starting with this, you gloss over at least two other appearances between and.


 * "she was targeted along with other Titans": Targeted by whom? Why? With which other Titans?


 * "after they disbanded": who disbanded?


 * "and was beaten badly." doesn't really explain much. Also doesn't follow up on this with her later appearances.

History sections should be balanced and readable, with roughly equal space devoted to major events. One haphazard sentence raises more questions than it seeks to answer.