Thread:JDKW/@comment-1038387-20140406102616/@comment-1038387-20140406104902

For one, don't use ampersands. Write everything out in full. The rest I can't help you with - I'm not your English teacher.

My other point, play-by-plays, is your summaries read like "and then... and then... and then...". Very little structure. A character history has basic details about someone's life, not (for example) an account how he walked to that shop in that one issue.