Thread:FabioEscorpiao/@comment-1038387-20161226151520

Hi. It's good that you give the minor Amazons a history sections, but can you make sure to vary your openings? Apart from monotonous, it's also needlessly wordy. Would any other character bio open with "she is a member of the human race"? Just say "she's an Amazon [whatever profession]."

Physical attributes such as hair color also don't need to be mentioned.

Also avoid repetition. Your expansion to Aleka gave it two very similar sounding paragraphs with opposite meanings. That's just confusing. 