Thread:Tupka217/@comment-33468852-20171229184821/@comment-1038387-20171229185810

And it's appreciated.

Character bios should start with a short line about who the character is. When people want to know, they want a quick snippet to get them orientated. The first thing they read shouldn't be a section about Origins (that don't actually mention any origins) and then mention what happened in one issue.

Another note: character bios should chronicle biographic information in chronological order. So no "was later revealed"s and such thing. I don't know enough about the character for a full rewrite, but...


 * Origins: Blabla, after earning a degree in [whatever]onomy, Dr. Dhawan worked briefly for ARGUS and then moved to STAR's Newton's Practical Application Department. When a [Speed Force storm?] hit the city [from within STAR Labs?], she was hit and gained powers blabla.
 * Lightning Strikes Twice: Blabla, appointed director, met with Flash and August Hearst, power testing, Fast Track
 * Expansion of later events, natch. Black Hole, Negative Flash, blabla

The original bio (which I've mostly salvaged for the intro blurb) was already pretty detailed. It could be trimmed a bit.